Question

I'm writing a synthesis paper for my college english composition class.

My topic is: The relationship between social class and public education.

So far, my thesis: My argument is that students in public education should not be discriminated against based on what social class they were born into.

But it needs a lot of work. So any input or advice would be great. I need an A on this paper, and in this class actually, so help would be greatly appreciated for this. :)

Thank you.

Answer 1

Social class is really difficult to define and measure. Economic class (family income) is much easier to find information on.

Answer 2

Leave "My argrument is" out, and start with the next word. Use "socio-economic" rather than "social class" -- unless you're talking about students in a country other than the US!!

Students in public schools in the US should not be discriminated against based on their socio-economic level.

But it's still not a very strong thesis; after all, who would argue against you?

Read these and let us know what you come up with.

http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/

http://www.indiana.edu/~wts/pamphlets/thesis_statement.shtml#strongthesis

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html

Answer 3

Ok. How about...:

Students should not be discriminated against other students based on their family's social status and income.