Question
Does the following commas need to be where they are? Thanks for your help!
I was recently informed by my professor,(teacher's name here), about a job opportunity in your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs, that might be available in your school district.
The first two commas are fine; the third one is not needed.
The sentence is awkward, though -- repetition of the "in" prepositional phrases:
<i>in your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs</i>
and
<i>in your school district</i>
One of them needs to go; perhaps they can be combined in some smooth way.
=)
I was recently informed by my professor,(teacher's name here), about a job opportunity in your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs, that might be available in your school district.
The first two commas are fine; the third one is not needed.
The sentence is awkward, though -- repetition of the "in" prepositional phrases:
<i>in your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs</i>
and
<i>in your school district</i>
One of them needs to go; perhaps they can be combined in some smooth way.
=)