I need opinions on this scary book I'm writing and be honest please so I know what I need to work on. this is only the first part I haven't started the rest:
Have you locked the door?
It was a cold Sunday night in March, and Allie was sitting in here room reading a when she heard an emergency alert go off from her phone it read “This is not a test we need everyone to stay inside and don’t leave until you hear otherwise thank”. She started freaking out not knowing what to do she was all alone no one to call …
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thank you* at the end i meant
This is not my thing but a few suggestions anyway:
It was a cold Sunday night in March, and Allie was sitting in her room reading WHAT? when she heard an emergency alert from her phone. It SAID “This is not a test we need everyone to stay inside and don’t leave until you hear otherwise. Thank you”. She started freaking out not knowing what to do. She was all alone with no one to call …
It was a cold Sunday night in March, and Allie was sitting in her room reading WHAT? when she heard an emergency alert from her phone. It SAID “This is not a test we need everyone to stay inside and don’t leave until you hear otherwise. Thank you”. She started freaking out not knowing what to do. She was all alone with no one to call …
Thank you so much! have a great day
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