Question

"So you're quite shook up about this then?" asked the detective.

"And what did you think of that?" inquired the detective.

"Where were you when they died?" questioned the detective.


Okay, I need help with the dialogue.
Is it correct the way it is thanks.
If not, how would I change it.

Answer 1

it looks correct to me

Answer 2

All of those are quite appropriate. However when writing dialogue, it is not always necessary to say "asked the detective." If there are only two speakers , you can just indent each time the speaker changes. If you wish to change the mood of the person talking you can use verbs like "interrupted", "menaced", "soothed", etc.
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