Thank you for using the Jiskha Homework Help Forum. Your essay is very interesting! A few grammar corrections:
Sentence 3, it's = it is; change to its
change the . to , = poaching, the park (to avoid a partial sentence)
rather than "unite as a one" delete "a" = unite as one
Why is "their political future" plural? Everywhere else, it has been "its..."
"greatly damage" needs to be "greatly damaged" ... Working on the same sentence, leading to many of the park's trees being chopped down and to animals being killed. (or you might want to restate all that)
After "rehabilitation plan that was established in 1997." When you combine 2 simple sentences into a complex one, your essay seems more sophisticated.
the World Heritage site = isn't it all capitalized? (World Heritage)
Some of the world's = possessive
Why are Tigers, Elephants, etc. capitalized?
Either indent the first word of each new paragraph, or skip a line. Paragraph 2 = The parks IS = should be The parks are or The park is. Both subject and verb should match = singular or plural... three (plural) major vegetations? or three major vegetation areas that
I wouldn't capitalize "Animals" in "The animals and plants..."
Paragraph 3 = animal's habitat = possessive & not "habit" but "habitat"... it causes (correct verb)
Rather than animals and plants and that area, you might like "animals and plants in that area."
It would be best to make all the corrections you can and then repost so it's easier to read.
Sra
hi all i was just wonrdering if someone read put of my paper and tell me how it sounds. thanks alot
amy
Manas National Park is a sanctuary and is on the World Heritage List. It is a place that has been through many changes and still faces many more. With it’s political instability and the threat of poaching. The park and its animals are facing some hard times. However, if the park and its country unite as a one, and make the necessary changes to improve the park and their political future, then there is nothing that can stand in its way.
Manas National Park was placed on the World Heritage list in 1992. It was placed on the site when the Bodo militants invaded the area to get political redress. When this happened the infrastructure was greatly damage, which leads to many of the park’s trees and animals to be killed and chopped down. After sometime the government of India and the state of Assam put into affect a rehabilitation plan. The plan was established in 1997. With this plan in place the security in and around the sanctuary has improved greatly. The WHC and the IUCN are trying to get Royal Manas National Park in Bhutan on the World heritage site as well. If this happens it would improve the protection of the ecosystem of the Manas Parks as a whole.
The life forms that are found in and around Manas National Park are very diverse with many different kinds of plants and animals. Some of the worlds most endanger animals call this park home. These animals include: Tigers, Elephants, Rhinos, Wild Buffaloes, Leopards, Clouded Leopards and one of the most endanger animal of all the Black Panther.
The parks is made up of three major vegetation that consist of semi-evergreen forest, mixed moist and dry deciduous forests, and several types of grassland. The grassland covers almost half of the park. The grassland future divides into two different types of grassland: semi-evergreen alluvial grassland and low alluvial savanna woodland.
The Animals and plants in the Manas National Park and across the world are dependent on each other. One without the other just would not work. The animals that eat plants also feed the animals that eat meat. Furthermore, when an animal dies it feeds the soil that feeds the plants. As we all know this is called the circle of life.
When humans intrude on the animals habit it cause deforestation. Deforestation happens when we cut down trees or other plant life, without replacing them. This makes it hard on all the animals and plants and that area.
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thank so much i will revise my paper thanks again
amy
amy