Question
Even in Hollywood, there was a “blacklist” of entertainment figures that should not be hired because they were suspect for their role in support in communism.
I believe this sentence is confusing with the use of should. Do you agree? If so, what word or words should I use instead?
I believe this sentence is confusing with the use of should. Do you agree? If so, what word or words should I use instead?
Answers
Writeacher
First of all, get rid of the wordiness.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm
Cortney
How about this?
Even in Hollywood, the practice of blacklisting became know. Entertainment figures were denied jobs because they were suspect for supporting communism.
Even in Hollywood, the practice of blacklisting became know. Entertainment figures were denied jobs because they were suspect for supporting communism.
Writeacher
Better.
What's the context that gives the reason for using the phrase "Even in Hollywood"? Why can't it just be "In Hollywood"?
Maybe this:
In Hollywood, the practice of blacklisting caused people to be denied jobs if they were suspected of supporting Communism.
(I'm not even sure "the practice of" needs to be in there!)
What's the context that gives the reason for using the phrase "Even in Hollywood"? Why can't it just be "In Hollywood"?
Maybe this:
In Hollywood, the practice of blacklisting caused people to be denied jobs if they were suspected of supporting Communism.
(I'm not even sure "the practice of" needs to be in there!)