In today's society, many middle class people argue that they cannot build wealth because of wrong choices , over spending, own a car, and rather go to school than work. Ms Sue is this better thesis

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Ms. Sue · Answer

Frankly, it's terrible! It does not have parallel structure and it's too long and wordy.

What's wrong with the first thesis idea I posted for you?

Also -- be sure you read the website I posted about thesis statements.

antonio · Answer

I though I need more stuff to put on my thesis. Thank you Ms.Sue got it!

Ms. Sue · Answer

You're welcome, Antonio.