Student - HELP!

This is my college essay: 1) At the University of Maryland, we value a diverse community. How have your life experiences and background shaped you into an individual who will enrich the University of Maryland community? As I stood on the balcony of my gra...

Each person in the choir came from a different background and social class, but were all bound together by the music we practiced.

i want this to sound smooth At first I didn’t believe that I could relate to my classmates in any way; we were all unique in terms of backgrounds and social classes.

the we sounds like its in the wrong tense or something.

we -> each of us?

still doesnt sound right

We all came from different backgrounds and social classes, but were all bound together by the music we practiced. Thanks@

We all came from different backgrounds and social classes, but related to each other through the music we practiced. something seems wrong

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How about instead of being influenced by evil, you combat it. Think of all the charities, all the societies, all the non profit organizations that are instituted to combat evil and harm. Educate people in the ways to prevent evil, turn a blind eye to the...

That'll be hard information to find. If you can't find any of this from looking at wikipedia or google searching, i suggest you talk to your teacher about it. Try talking to him and saying, "I mean I understand why these big companies wouldn't want the pu...