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Can you please check this essay and tell me if it's ok. It was like taking that first bite into a slice of cheese pizza after a long day of work, and being Blissfully on cloud 9 at the same time! that's how I felt when I got my first free psychic reading...

Tried to fix the errors... But really don't know what to do - does it sound better than last time- _____________________________ It was like taking that first bite into a slice of cheese pizza after a long day of work, and being Blissfully on cloud 9 at t...