I think you need to start from scratch.
If you're having this much trouble writing this paper, you need to chuck it and start over.
Use the idea list Ms Sue gave you yesterday. She's right.
Writeacher, I truly need your help. I must finish this essay tonight but I am struggling. I read my thesis statement along with the first body paragraph, but it doesn't correspond whatsoever! I think I may need to rewrite the entire first paragraph. I don't know what to do.
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Yes, but she gave me ideas I would only be able to use if I was writing an essay about ways people are less fearful than those of past generations.
Victoria -- I told you the reasons you listed should be used as an outline for your essay. Some of them included bullying, walking alone at night, economics, losing a job, .
Then post your original outline, and I'll see what I can suggest.
I don't how to begin my first body paragraph, though.
You're wasting a lot of time not doing what I asked you to do. I'm not going back in this website to find your outline. If you don't post it, I can't read it.
I. People are more fearful of violence as it has intensified.
A. Shootings
1. As a result of the Batman Massacre, midnight premieres no longer exists, which is ultimately an act of fear.
2. More schools are being armed with armed security guards after the Sandy Brooke Elementary Shooting in fear of it happening again.
B. Abductions
1. ?
2. ?
II. People are more fearful of bullying because not only is it more cruel, but the consequences are more severe. (I am not certain about this one.)
A. Bullying
B. ?
III. People are more fearful of the economy and the possibility of losing their jobs as, without their jobs, they would be unable to survive in the economy, which would render them homeless.
A. Loss of jobs
1. ?
2. ?
B. The economy
1. ?
2. ?
A. Shootings
1. As a result of the Batman Massacre, midnight premieres no longer exists, which is ultimately an act of fear.
2. More schools are being armed with armed security guards after the Sandy Brooke Elementary Shooting in fear of it happening again.
B. Abductions
1. ?
2. ?
II. People are more fearful of bullying because not only is it more cruel, but the consequences are more severe. (I am not certain about this one.)
A. Bullying
B. ?
III. People are more fearful of the economy and the possibility of losing their jobs as, without their jobs, they would be unable to survive in the economy, which would render them homeless.
A. Loss of jobs
1. ?
2. ?
B. The economy
1. ?
2. ?
What kinds of abductions can you think of? Who does the abducting? Of whom?
What kinds of bullying can you think of? Who does the different kinds of bullying? What are some results?
... same kinds of questions for your other question marks.
What kinds of bullying can you think of? Who does the different kinds of bullying? What are some results?
... same kinds of questions for your other question marks.
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