The revision that shows a tone that is judgmental toward women is:
"Men hold more 'hard' beats than women. Women usually choose their children over their jobs, while men show more commitment to their work with their willingness to travel and work irregular hours."
This revision implies that women are making a conscious choice to prioritize their children over their careers, while framing men's commitment to work as more admirable, which conveys a judgmental attitude towards women's decisions and responsibilities.