which sentence is the best revision?
a. My niece is a ballet dancer.
b. My niece is a ballet dancer who performs both solo ballets and as a member of the ballet corps.
c. My niece is a ballet dancer and I always enjoy attending performances.
3 answers
short is always better, it reads better, easier to understand, and will be remembered. Can you find the flaws in b and c?
No sir
b. my neice is a ballet dancer...as a member of ... Not parallel construction.
c. My neice is ...and I always...and President Obama is ....and the moon is made of green cheese. Don't make compound sentences of disconnected thoughts...
c. My neice is ...and I always...and President Obama is ....and the moon is made of green cheese. Don't make compound sentences of disconnected thoughts...