That’s WAY too long for a thesis statement. And adding to it won’t help! Statement = one sentence. Start with “dance and movement both ... “ and put everything before that inside the paper where it fits.
leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
Check out the pairs of sentences here — the second in each pair is a good thesis statement.
What would be a good conclusion for my thesis statement?
Dance is effective in the elementary education classroom because dance teaches empathy and movement allows for cultural expression, and dance and movement both integrate academic learning with kinesthetic intelligence.
Please help ASAP my homework is due today!!! :(
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No it's not it's only this: Dance is effective in the elementary education classroom because dance teaches empathy and movement allows for cultural expression, and dance and movement both integrate academic learning with kinesthetic intelligence. :)
Did you bother to read through this webpage?
https://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
MS is right. Only this should be your thesis statement:
Dance and movement both integrate academic learning with kinesthetic intelligence.
I see the rest as topic sentences for the supporting paragraphs in the whole essay.
Dance is effective in the elementary education classroom
and
dance teaches empathy and movement allows for cultural expression
https://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
MS is right. Only this should be your thesis statement:
Dance and movement both integrate academic learning with kinesthetic intelligence.
I see the rest as topic sentences for the supporting paragraphs in the whole essay.
Dance is effective in the elementary education classroom
and
dance teaches empathy and movement allows for cultural expression
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