What sentence requires revision to maintain a formal style?(1 point)

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William Penn used his considerable wealth to assist his fellow Quakers in England, where they often faced persecution for their beliefs.
William Penn used his considerable wealth to assist his fellow Quakers in England, where they often faced persecution for their beliefs.

Quakers like William Penn wouldn't pay taxes to support wars because they were against it, and this made people angry.
Quakers like William Penn wouldn't pay taxes to support wars because they were against it, and this made people angry.

Born into a distinguished family, William Penn joined the Religious Society of Friends, or Quakers, at the age of 22.
Born into a distinguished family, William Penn joined the Religious Society of Friends, or Quakers, at the age of 22.

The Duke of York was good friends with William Penn, and he signed a charter granting an expansive territory that became known as Pennsylvania.
The Duke of York was good friends with William Penn, and he signed a charter granting an expansive territory that became known as Pennsylvania.

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The sentence that requires revision to maintain a formal style is:

"Quakers like William Penn wouldn't pay taxes to support wars because they were against it, and this made people angry."

To revise this, you can replace "wouldn't" with "would not" and "this made people angry" with a more formal phrase, such as "which caused significant dissatisfaction among the populace."

A revised version could read: "Quakers like William Penn would not pay taxes to support wars because they were opposed to it, which caused significant dissatisfaction among the populace."

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