Your essay has some good points, but there are several grammatical and punctuation errors, as well as a few stylistic suggestions. Here’s a revised version with corrections and improvements:
Revised Version:
"The invention of silk was definitely the most important. Why? You may be asking. Well, I'll tell you why. Silk can be made into shirts, suits, ties, bed sheets, pillowcases, and much more. Now, things such as shirts are rarely made from silk; only about 0.2% of shirts are made from silk, and pretty much everything is now made from cheaper materials such as polyester and wool. Back in the day, though, almost all clothes were made from silk. It may not be as important nowadays, but it was such a key material back then. There you have it: my argument on why silk is the most important thing on the list."
Key Corrections and Improvements:
- "definetly" to "definitely": Spelling correction.
- "Sik" to "Silk": Corrected capitalization.
- Revised sentence structure: Changed "much more things are all made from silk" to "much more" for clarity and flow.
- Added a comma after "Now" and before "though": These commas clarify the sentence structure.
- Changed "was made from silk" to "were made from silk": Subject-verb agreement; "clothes" is plural.
- "now adays" to "nowadays": Spelling correction.
- "argumant" to "argument": Spelling correction.
- Replaced "back in the day" with "back then": This avoids repetition.
- Corrected punctuation: Changed "There you have it my argumant" to "There you have it: my argument" for clarity and correct punctuation.
Additional Suggestions:
- Clarity: Make sure to clearly define why silk was important historically compared to modern materials.
- Variational language: Try to vary sentence starters and lengths for a more engaging read.
- Transition words: Consider using transition words (e.g., however, additionally, therefore) to connect your ideas smoothly.
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