We're having our 5th grade recognition soon and we had to write a poem for our program. Our thyme is 'Soaring to New Heights.' I have written a poem and I was hoping for some editing from you. Here is the poem:
We're tiny eggs lying inside our nest
where our parents keep us warm.
We soon hatch from those shells,
and chirp our first words.
While we're still young, they do things for us like getting us food and feeding us.
Now we are growing up and doing somethings for ourselves.
Today, we're learning how to fly up high.
At first we get a bit of a struggle, but after sometime we've finally reached the heights we've been longing.
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Oh, and 'for' in the fourth last sentence shuold be 'by.'
We're tiny eggs lying inside our nest
where our parents keep us warm.
Try to keep the rest of the poem in the same meter or rhythm of your first two lines. The whole poem will sound much better.
We're TI-ny EGGS ly-ing IN-SIDE our NEST
where our PAR-ents KEEP us WARM.
Say those lines aloud until you hear the same rhythm I do. Then duplicate that rhythm in the other lines.
where our parents keep us warm.
Try to keep the rest of the poem in the same meter or rhythm of your first two lines. The whole poem will sound much better.
We're TI-ny EGGS ly-ing IN-SIDE our NEST
where our PAR-ents KEEP us WARM.
Say those lines aloud until you hear the same rhythm I do. Then duplicate that rhythm in the other lines.