We have several beautiful places here in Busan. I would like to introduce two of them. One is Shinsege Department Store which many people visit to buy clothing and other goods. The sidewalks near the department store are crowded with people. There is a Starbucks coffee shop close to the department store. I have often visited this coffee shop, which is full of customers.
The other is the Busan Cinema Center where many kinds of movies are shown. We feel comfortable there, and we can purchase drinks and popcorn. It is fantastic to watch a movie in this great place with close friends.
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We have several beautiful places here in Busan. I would like to intorduce two of them.
One is Shinsege Department Store. Many people visit the department store to buy things. The sidewalks near the department store is crowded with people. There is a Starbucks coffee shop close to the department store. I have ever visited this coffee shop, which is full of customers.
The other is the Busan Cinema Center, where many kidns of movies are shown. We feel comfortable there and we can purchase drinks and popcorn. It is fantastic to watch a movie in this great place with close friends.
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