Use the sentence to answer the question.
We could go to the mall, or would you rather shop online?
In a short paragraph, identify the mood shift and explain how to correct it.
(4 points)
3 answers
The mood shift in this sentence is from a positive suggestion of going to the mall to a more negative or indifferent tone with the question about shopping online. To correct the mood shift and make the sentence more cohesive, you could rephrase it to: "We could go to the mall, or we could stay home and shop online instead. What do you think?" This way, both options are presented in a more neutral manner, and the question at the end maintains a sense of openness and collaboration.
Use simpler vocabulary
The sentence suggests going to the mall, but then asks if shopping online is better. To make it sound better, you could say: "We can go to the mall or shop online. What do you want to do?" This way, both options are presented evenly, and the question is more friendly.