Laya waited to put the muffins in the oven. She knew as soon as they went in, the smell would let the cat out of the bag. She never managed to surprise her sister with breakfast on her birthday. Mai always woke up first—or, even if she didn’t, caught Laya mid-cook.
Which revision would help the paragraph use more sensory language?
(1 point)
Responses
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
adding “impatiently” after “waited”
adding “impatiently” after “waited”
adding “hot” before “oven”
adding “hot” before “oven”
adding “red-handed” after “caught Laya”
1 answer
The best option to enhance the sensory language of the paragraph is:
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
This revision adds a vivid sensory detail that helps the reader visualize and imagine the delicious smell associated with the muffins, thereby creating a more immersive experience.
