Laya waited to put the muffins in the oven. She knew as soon as they went in, the smell would let the cat out of the bag. She never managed to surprise her sister with breakfast on her birthday. Mai always woke up first—or, even if she didn’t, caught Laya mid-cook.
Which revision would help the paragraph use more sensory language?
(1 point)
Responses
adding “red-handed” after “caught Laya”
adding “red-handed” after “caught Laya”
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
adding “impatiently” after “waited”
adding “impatiently” after “waited”
adding “hot” before “oven”
1 answer
The revision that would help the paragraph use more sensory language is:
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell.”
This revision provides specific sensory details that evoke smell, enhancing the imagery and overall sensory experience of the paragraph.
