The best revision that would help the paragraph use more sensory language is:
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
Use the paragraph to answer the question.
Laya waited to put the muffins in the oven. She knew as soon as they went in, the smell would let the cat out of the bag. She never managed to surprise her sister with breakfast on her birthday. Mai always woke up first—or, even if she didn’t, caught Laya mid-cook.
Which revision would help the paragraph use more sensory language?
(1 point)
Responses
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
adding “of warm pumpkin and spices” after “smell”
adding “red-handed” after “caught Laya”
adding “red-handed” after “caught Laya”
adding “hot” before “oven”
adding “hot” before “oven”
adding “impatiently” after “waited”
2 answers
Use the paragraph to answer the question.
There was something unknowable about her smile. Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out what she was thinking.
Which revision would introduce an allusion to make the description more vivid?
(1 point)
Responses
add “like a mysterious old song” after “smile”
add “like a mysterious old song” after “smile”
replace “Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out” with “Even with the skills of Sherlock himself, I couldn’t have figured out”
replace “Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out” with “Even with the skills of Sherlock himself, I couldn’t have figured out”
replace “smile” with “Mona Lisa smile”
replace “smile” with “Mona Lisa smile”
add “in a million years” after “Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out”
There was something unknowable about her smile. Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out what she was thinking.
Which revision would introduce an allusion to make the description more vivid?
(1 point)
Responses
add “like a mysterious old song” after “smile”
add “like a mysterious old song” after “smile”
replace “Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out” with “Even with the skills of Sherlock himself, I couldn’t have figured out”
replace “Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out” with “Even with the skills of Sherlock himself, I couldn’t have figured out”
replace “smile” with “Mona Lisa smile”
replace “smile” with “Mona Lisa smile”
add “in a million years” after “Try as I might, I couldn’t figure out”