Unit 7, Lesson 9 Portfolio

Narrative Essay

Instructions:
Read “Weight” by Dohnielle Clayton
Imagine how the story might have continued after the ending--what do you think the results will show?
Complete this "Weight" Review graphic organizer and submit to the U7L9 drop box
Use this checklist to revise as you create your final draft essay. Write at least 2 pages of the ending you’ve imagined. Don’t forget to focus on including details, description, and dialogue.
Submit your completed final draft to the U7L12 drop box

Requirements:
Correct MLA formatting
A minimum of 2 pages double spaced
Begin your ending with a sentence that appears on the last page of the original short story to transition from the original author’s voice to your own
Creative ending that follows the natural progression of events from the story
Use the following narrative techniques: dialogue, description, pacing, reflection
Integrate ideas from the original passage
Proper spelling and conventions

this is what I have so far

“The hearticians walked in holding sheets of paper. The vitalized ink skittered across the pages. ‘Results are in.’
Marcus and Grace didn’t turn their heads.
Instead, they faced each other.”
Marcus and Grace stared deeply into one another’s eyes. Each wondered if the hearticians words would bring a glimmer of hope or if their world was about to come crashing down around them. Marcus, for his part, feared the latter. He felt his heart drum erratically in his chest, a heavy thud that echoed the uncertainty racing through his mind. Beads of sweat collected at the nape of his neck as he clenched his hands, and the dampness on his palms was a testament to his anxiety. Grace, her face pale and taut, stared at the floor, her breath quickening with every passing second. She felt light-headed as if the floor beneath her was shifting beyond her control. Together they decided to hear the results but they did not know which heart contained which results.
Grace was the first to react. She let out a shaky breath, and with a voice thick with tears sputtered,
“Marcus, I don’t know what to think. I have more questions than answers.”
Marcus felt shaken to his core. His mind was reeling. He knew Grace needed him to say something, but he felt mute. Thoughts swirled and dissipated in his mind. Finally, he had an epiphany.
“Grace, I think I understand the results. I’ve been so afraid of becoming my Dad that I wasn’t sure that I would be able to love you and only you for the rest of my life. His actions have skewed the way I view love, but I think my heart showed that my love for him is fading because I don’t want to become the same type of person that he is.”
Grace simultaneously felt a surge of relief that Marcus’s love for her was not fading, and she also felt distraught that Marcus had been consumed by so much self-doubt.

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Title: The Weight of Love

“The hearticians walked in holding sheets of paper. The vitalized ink skittered across the pages. ‘Results are in.’
Marcus and Grace didn’t turn their heads.
Instead, they faced each other.”

Marcus and Grace stared deeply into one another’s eyes. Each wondered if the hearticians' words would bring a glimmer of hope or if their world was about to come crashing down around them. Marcus, for his part, feared the latter. He felt his heart drum erratically in his chest, a heavy thud that echoed the uncertainty racing through his mind. Beads of sweat collected at the nape of his neck as he clenched his hands, and the dampness on his palms was a testament to his anxiety. Grace, her face pale and taut, stared at the floor, her breath quickening with every passing second. She felt light-headed as if the floor beneath her was shifting beyond her control. Together they decided to hear the results but did not know which heart contained which results.

Grace was the first to react. She let out a shaky breath, and with a voice thick with tears sputtered, “Marcus, I don’t know what to think. I have more questions than answers.”

Marcus felt shaken to his core. His mind was reeling. He knew Grace needed him to say something, but he felt mute. Thoughts swirled and dissipated in his mind. Finally, he had an epiphany. “Grace, I think I understand the results. I’ve been so afraid of becoming my dad that I wasn’t sure that I would be able to love you and only you for the rest of my life. His actions have skewed the way I view love, but I think my heart showed that my love for him is fading because I don’t want to become the same type of person that he is.”

Grace felt a surge of relief that Marcus’s love for her was not fading, but she also felt distraught that he had been consumed by so much self-doubt. “Marcus, you are not your father. You have the power to choose your own path. We can face this together.”

Their hands found each other, fingers interlocking like a sturdy bridge. The warmth of his touch grounded Grace, but the chaos in her heart remained. “Do you really think the results will define us?” she asked, her voice soft yet firm.

“I don’t think they will,” Marcus replied, squeezing her hand. “But maybe they’ll help us understand ourselves better. Let’s just be ready for whatever they tell us. No matter what.”

Moments felt like hours as they awaited the hearticians' words. Finally, the tall heartician cleared his throat. “The results indicate that…” His voice faltered, the air thick with suspense. Marcus felt the weight of the world pressing down on him.

Finally, after a long pause, the heartician continued, “Marcus’s heart showed a deep connection to love, but it is impacted by fear and the need to break generational cycles.” Murmurs spread through the audience behind them. “And Grace’s heart reflects an abundance of love, yet it also harbors an undercurrent of anxiety regarding her worthiness.”

Marcus turned his gaze to Grace, his expression a mixture of concern and admiration. “They see us,” he whispered, barely audible.

“They do,” Grace replied, her eyes glistening with unshed tears. “But we can change how our hearts bleed into our lives.”

The heartician finished with a nod. “You both have the potential for profound love, but it is essential to confront and embrace your fears. Growth comes from understanding.”

Grace took a deep breath, steadying herself. “Marcus, we can redefine what love means for us. It doesn’t have to look like our parents’ relationships or anyone else’s."

He nodded slowly. “Yeah. Let’s make our own definition of love. One that acknowledges the truth of our experiences but doesn’t let them dictate our happiness.”

She felt hope dance brightly in her heart. “Things will take time. We have work to do, but I want to dive into that with you. Will you go to therapy with me?”

“Of course,” Marcus replied, his voice resolute. “I want to heal, for us. Together.”

As they walked out of the heartician’s office, arms draped around each other’s shoulders, the world felt a little less heavy. For the first time in a long while, Grace felt lighter, the weight of her anxiety lifted by the possibilities of the future.

“Marcus, this is just the beginning, right?” she asked, glancing up at him, searching his gaze for affirmation.

“Absolutely,” he replied, the corners of his mouth lifting into a smile. “We’ll identify the pitfalls that have held us back, and we’ll rise above them.”

The pathway illuminated by tentative glowing streetlights seemed to mirror their unsteady yet determined steps. With every stride, they discarded the old myths of love that had plagued their families and began to write their own story, one where vulnerability was not a weakness but a treasure.

And in that moment, they understood: love was not a weight to bear but a journey they would navigate side by side.


Works Cited

Clayton, Dohnielle. “Weight.” [Insert publication details].

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