I would remove the word "the" after "During" but that's all. Everything else looks and reads very well.
Nice!!
Traveling to Paksanghan Waterfall
During the summer vacation, I went to Paksanghan Waterfall in the Philippines. I went there by zeepney and by canoe. In front of the waterfall, I took a lot of pictures. It was great fun to bathe in the water under the waterfall. I always feel happy when I look at this picture.
(Would you like to correct the story? Thank you.)
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