To improve his paper, Toby should vary the sentence structure. By doing so, he can enhance the flow and engagement of the paragraph. For example, he could combine some of the shorter sentences or use more complex sentence structures to create a more persuasive and engaging argument.
Toby wrote this paragraph for his persuasive essay:
Anyone can grow a garden. You can grow fresh vegetables. You can harvest all summer. The vegetables taste good. Growing a garden is good exercise. You pull weeds. You trim plants. Everyone should grow a vegetable garden.
What change should Toby make to improve his paper?
use less slang language
add a transition after the first sentence
vary the sentence structure
think of a word to replace “vegetable”
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