Title:The dawn it comes

Question

There once was a boy named John
whose never saw the dawn.
When the sun went down
and went to the pond.
And saw what was dim.

Is this a good poem?

This is a limerick, lines 1,2,and 5 must rhyme.Lines 3 and 4 must rhyme. Please help if can.

Answer 1

Your rhymes don't rhyme.

It's hard to rhyme John. How about making your first line --

Here's a boy named Johnny
Who never had much money.

Answer 2

can i start the third line like this?:
When he got poor

fourth line:
and went for a call.

line 5:
And the sun turned sunny.

Answer 3

Your third and fourth lines don't rhyme, but your fifth line looks good.

Answer 4

then can the fourth one be:
and became boor

Answer 5

The fourth line doesn't make much sense.

Here are some words that rhyme with poor:

doer, fewer, newer, sewer, tour,

Answer 6

so can the fourth line be:
and went for the sewer

Answer 7

Yes.

Answer 8

Thanks

Answer 9

You're welcome.