this is what i wrote As he looked upon the green vines, a newfound determination and sense of purpose began to stir within him, motivated by the memories of his beloved family and the
With renewed determination, he made his way to the real estate market, ready to sell his garden and embark on a new journey in the countryside, where he could once again cultivate the land and nurture life, just like he did with his family by his side.
fix the feedback Show me how he comes to the epiphany that he wants to sell his house and move to countryside, don’t just tell me he gets a sense of purpose)
(Instead of him making his way, he makes the decision to start life anew)write in one pargraph could include monologue him saying word out aloud
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As he gazed upon the vibrant green vines, memories of his beloved family flooded his mind, stirring a newfound sense of purpose within him. "I will sell this garden," he declared aloud, the words echoing in the stillness of the moment. With a determined heart, he made the decision to start life anew in the countryside, where he could once again cultivate the land and nurture life, just as he did with his family by his side. This epiphany brought a wave of peace and excitement, propelling him forward towards a future filled with possibilities.