See below.
You need to start over with that topic ... choose an angle and stick with it.
This is regarding to the previous essay (the contradicting myself one).
How am I contradicting myself?
I am saying that memory is not central because it causes a person to reflect on the misery which is not good. This is the negative side of remembering the past .
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http://sat.collegeboard.org/practice/sat-practice-questions/writing-tips
Scroll down a bit to the section called Practice Questions and go through all four sections under Writing.
http://www.majortests.com/sat/writing-skills.php
Several links here will help you.
And you may find more in here:
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http://sat.collegeboard.org/practice/sat-practice-questions/writing-tips
Scroll down a bit to the section called Practice Questions and go through all four sections under Writing.
http://www.majortests.com/sat/writing-skills.php
Several links here will help you.
And you may find more in here:
http://www.google.com/search?q=sat+writing+practice&oq=sat+writing+practice&aqs=chrome..69i57j69i65j0l3.7354j0&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8
This is also really good:
http://www.sat-essay.net/sample-sat-essays.html
http://www.sat-essay.net/sample-sat-essays.html