To sum up, my hypothesis was correct. I predicted that the plant that got the most sun would be the most colorful and the plants that were in the shade every day or even half of the days would lose their color. The data supports the hypothesis exactly as I predicted it would. I found out that light does affect the pigment of the leaves. What I wished I could have improved is having more sun. During my observations, the sky was mostly cloudy.
Read and compare carefully. I made several changes.
This is for my science fair project conclusion and I was wondering If it's good like that?......To sum up briefly, my hypothesis was correct I predicted that my plant that got the most sun would be the most colorful and my plants that were in the shade everyday and even half of the days well lose its color. The data supports the hypothesis exactly how I predicted it would. I found out that light does affect the pigment of the leaves. What I did wish I could have improved is to have more sun, during my observations the sky was mostly cloudy.
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Thank you so much that looks and sounds better then the one I had (:
You're welcome!
How about now?......To sum up, my hypothesis was correct. I predicted that the plant that got the most sun would be the most colorful and the plants that were in the shade every day or even half of the days would lose their color. The data supports the hypothesis exactly as I predicted it would. I found out that light does affect the pigment of the leaves. What I wished I could have improved is having more sun. During my observations, the sky was mostly cloudy which therefore made it hard to observe. The reason I say that is because Plant C was lighter than Plant A yet plant C it’s leaves kept falling out.
... What I wish I could have improved is having more sun. During my observations, the sky was mostly cloudy which made it hard to observe. The reason I say that is because Plant C was lighter than Plant A, yet plant C’s leaves kept falling out.
It still seems wordy to me. What unnecessary words can you cut out? When you do that, some rephrasing will be necessary.
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