Just because it has five lines and rhymes, that does not make it a limerick. There is a certain very strict meter which must be followed. Read a bunch of them, then try again. Your meter is way off.
The rhythm must be as in
There was an old man from Nantucket
Who kept all his cash in a bucket.
His daughter, named Nan,
Ran away with a man,
And as for the bucket, Nan tuck it!
The best limericks, besides having good scansion and rhyme, usually contain an amusing twist in the last line, as in
A limerick's never averse
To expressing itself in a terse
Economical style,
And yet all the while,
A limerick's always</it> a verse!
There once was a man who had ripped pants He kept his legs close whenever he danced
He never got new ones cause he had to pay
I don't have no money is what he would say
i got that so far i know i need one more line but i don't understand what i should say would it make sense to say the man never got have new pants
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oops - bad closing tag...
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