If you can cut the number of words in that long convoluted sentence, then it might work!
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
The sentence below is a workable thesis statement.
The U.S. manufacturing industry should receive more government subsidies so that it can compete worldwide with companies whose governments give greater subsidies
1. True 2.False
I say True. Check my answer
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maybe something like:
Increased government subsidies would make US manufacturers more competitive with heavily subsidized foreign industries.
Increased government subsidies would make US manufacturers more competitive with heavily subsidized foreign industries.