"The Rippling Sea"
Such a vast, blue puddle.
A breezy wind, splashing the water in a muddle.
The scent of salty fresh air lingers in the pool.
The feeling of the water, wet and cool.
A briny taste of the salted deep.
The fishy flavor starts to seep.
This poem is supposed to use all the 5 senses to describe the ocean. You're supposed to know that it's about the sea without looking at the title, according to my assignment.
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Oh, and in line one, it wasn't supposed to say 'a' breezy wind.
*Line 2
Anyone? All i'm asking is if I should change wording, and if it's using the 5 senses (you know, sight, touch, taste, sound, smell) well.
The only sense that seems missing to me is sound. Which line(s) did you intend to reflect that?
Splashing of the water from the wind.
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