The morning was cool and crisp. Fenton rode his bike down the big hill toward the school. Fluffy silver clouds overhead promised rain or snow to come. Fenton’s breath puffed in the air as he zipped over the chilly concrete path. Where might this passage benefit from the use of a more specific description instead of a more general one? (1 point)

Question

Instead of “cool and crisp” the writer might choose “chilly and bright.”
Instead of “bike” the writer might choose “Schwinn Thrasher.”
Instead of “concrete” the writer might choose “slick.”
Instead of “rain or snow” the writer might choose “storms.”

Answer 1

The passage might benefit from a more specific description instead of a more general one in the following way:

Instead of “bike,” the writer might choose “Schwinn Thrasher.”

This would give readers a clearer image of the type of bike Fenton is riding and could add to his character and the setting.