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The best way to buy a car.
In the first place, people enjoy the companionship of car. Cars can be helpful in many ways. The best thing they are good for is going places. It is good to know that you have your own car. Owning your own car means not having to call someone for a ride or walking. Using your own car means going where you want to go and how far you want to go.
In the second place, The kind of car you want. What is the make and model of the car you want Chevy Malibu or Nissan Rogue. Do you want your car to be a certain color. Red or blue. What year do your car have to be made in? 2000 car or maybe a 2008 car. What is your price range? 2,000 to 3,000 or 22,000 to 26,000.
Lastly, places to look when buying a car. There's the car section in the newspaper, the internet, and the phone book.
The car section in the newspaper supply you with the ability to look over cars, prices, the name of the business that's selling, and the number to contact them. The internet supply you with a lot of information on cars and sellers. Rather you want to buy locally or from somewhere a few miles down the road. The phone book helps with contact numbers of car dealers in the phone book. Locally mostly. It is best to know what you have so far locally before searching farther out that way you won't have to travel far.
When buying a car. Make sure that everything is right about the car. Bring someone along that knows about cars and how it should run. Get car insurance. You should have a drivers license before buying a car to show it as proof. A lot of decisions have to be made when buying a car.
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"The best way to buy a car"
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"The best way to buy a car"
were the introduction
In the first place, people enjoy the companionship of car. (YOU SEE THE CAR AS A "COMPANION"? "OWNERSHIP" MIGHT BE BETTER.) Cars can be helpful in many ways. The best thing they are good for is going places. It is good to know that you have your own car. Owning your own car means not having to call someone for a ride or walking. (PUT WALKING FIRST, SO IT DOESN'T SEEM LIKE YOU CALL SOMEONE TO WALK.) Using your own car means going where you want to go and how far you want to go.
In the second place, The kind of car you want. (NOT A SENTENCE.) What is the make and model of the car you want (COMMA) Chevy Malibu or Nissan Rogue. ("?") Do you want your car to be a certain color. (COMMA, NO CAPS) Red or blue.("?" AGAIN) What year do(ES) your car have to be made in? (COMMA) 2000 car or maybe a 2008 car.("?") What is your price range? (COMMA) 2,000 to 3,000 or 22,000 to 26,000.("?")
Lastly, places to look when buying a car. There's the car section in the newspaper, the internet, and the phone book. The car section in the newspaper ("WILL") supply you with the ability to look over cars, prices, the name of the business that's selling, and the number to contact them. The internet supply you with a lot of information on cars and sellers. (COMMA, "WHETHER") Rather you want to buy locally or from somewhere a few miles down the road. The phone book helps with contact numbers of car dealers in the phone book. Locally mostly. (NOT A SENTENCE) It is best to know what you have so far locally before searching farther out (SEMICOLON) that way you won't have to travel far.
When buying a car. (COMMA) Make sure that everything is right about the car. Bring someone along that knows about cars and how it (PLURAL TO MATCH "CARS.") should run. Get car insurance. You should have a drivers (POSSESSIVE) license before buying a car to show it as proof. (OF WHAT?) A lot of decisions have to be made when buying a car.
These problems are beside the lack of an introduction.
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
I hope this helps a little more. Thanks for asking.
In the second place, The kind of car you want. (NOT A SENTENCE.) What is the make and model of the car you want (COMMA) Chevy Malibu or Nissan Rogue. ("?") Do you want your car to be a certain color. (COMMA, NO CAPS) Red or blue.("?" AGAIN) What year do(ES) your car have to be made in? (COMMA) 2000 car or maybe a 2008 car.("?") What is your price range? (COMMA) 2,000 to 3,000 or 22,000 to 26,000.("?")
Lastly, places to look when buying a car. There's the car section in the newspaper, the internet, and the phone book. The car section in the newspaper ("WILL") supply you with the ability to look over cars, prices, the name of the business that's selling, and the number to contact them. The internet supply you with a lot of information on cars and sellers. (COMMA, "WHETHER") Rather you want to buy locally or from somewhere a few miles down the road. The phone book helps with contact numbers of car dealers in the phone book. Locally mostly. (NOT A SENTENCE) It is best to know what you have so far locally before searching farther out (SEMICOLON) that way you won't have to travel far.
When buying a car. (COMMA) Make sure that everything is right about the car. Bring someone along that knows about cars and how it (PLURAL TO MATCH "CARS.") should run. Get car insurance. You should have a drivers (POSSESSIVE) license before buying a car to show it as proof. (OF WHAT?) A lot of decisions have to be made when buying a car.
These problems are beside the lack of an introduction.
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
I hope this helps a little more. Thanks for asking.