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Those who remember this but remember the time when we first went to Lincoln Park and got in the big wooden rollercoaster ride. And as we ride up the track ti the edge…terrified yet thrilled…we were ready to take the leap into something new.

Answer 1

Those who recall this remember the first time we visited Lincoln Park and climbed aboard the large wooden roller coaster. As we ascended the track toward the precipice—filled with a mix of fear and excitement—we braced ourselves to take the plunge into something new.