Rewrite the sentences focusing on grammar: Inclusive Language—Quoting from Biased Material

Back in the 1400s, the laws governing the people were quite specific: “All men shall tithe 10% to the church and pay taxes every six months. All men can attend school until they are 16 years of age.”

There is nothing to change here.

It's a quote from the 1400s. We can't change history.

thank you. Plesae let me know if this is a good sentence using:Inclusive Language—Talking about People with Disabilities and Disease

People who were vision impaired went downtown for a national conference.

You're welcome.

That looks like a factual sentence. I don't see any other way of stating it.