Revision of second paragraph: "Liesure time is another one of my favorite things about summer. It brings me happiness beyond belief. It enables me to spend time with my family, to take part in the things they wish to do. It enables me to live life without the worry of schoolwork or the hours of exercise I haven't yet completed. This spare time ultimately brings life into perspective. It makes me realize what's truly important."
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This doesn't make sense: " ... or the hours of exercise I haven't yet completed."
Should I remove this part of the sentence or revise it?
I'd just delete it. It's somewhat redundant.