Many people tried very hard to save the building of the Chicago Tribune.
Which revision is the best example of adding concrete detail?
Many people tried very hard for a very long time to save the Chicago Tribune building during the fire.
In an attempt to save the Chicago Tribune building, men stayed on the roof for as long as possible during the fire.
In an attempt to save the Chicago Tribune building, men stayed on the roof for as long as possible during the fire, keeping it wet and stamping out cinders.
Many people kept the roof of the building wet and stamped out cinders, trying to stop it from being enveloped in flames as the fire spread very quickly.
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The best revision that adds concrete detail is:
In an attempt to save the Chicago Tribune building, men stayed on the roof for as long as possible during the fire, keeping it wet and stamping out cinders.
This option provides specific actions taken by the men (staying on the roof, keeping it wet, and stamping out cinders), which paints a clearer and more vivid picture of the efforts to save the building during the fire.
