1. When I was in fifth grade, my family became interested in fostering kittens from the local animal shelter. 2. First, we had to fill out an application. 3. Next, we had to attend a workshop on caring for kittens properly. 4. A woman from the shelter came to our house to see if it was a safe environment for kittens. 5. Finally, we were approved. 6. That was an exciting day!
Which is the best revision of sentence 4?
After that, a woman from the shelter came to our house to see if it was a safe environment for kittens.
She came to our house to see if it was a safe environment for kittens.
Finally, a woman from the shelter came to our house to see if it was a safe environment for kittens.
I came our house to see if it was a safe environment for kittens.
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The best revision of sentence 4 is:
She came to our house to see if it was a safe environment for kittens.
This revision maintains clarity and keeps the focus on the action while avoiding the redundancy of "Finally," which is already used in sentence 5.
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