The best option for what is needed at the beginning of sentence 5 is a time relationship to show the connection between events more clearly. Adding a time reference would help clarify how much time has passed since the narrator first observed Ben's behavior and then saw him actively digging in the dirt lot. For example, starting the sentence with "Later" or "The next day" would improve the flow and clarity of the narrative.
Read the paragraph from a personal narrative.
1. I remember when Ben first had the idea for a community garden. 2. We were walking home from school past an old abandoned dirt lot. 3. Ben stood and stared through the fence for awhile lost in thought. 4. I thought he was acting strangely. 5. I was walking by the dirt lot again, and there was Ben digging up the dirt with a shovel.
What is needed at the beginning of sentence 5?
a time relationship to show the connection between events more clearly
a different pronoun to maintain the story’s first-person point of view
a strong example that shows how Ben’s behavior was strange
an opinion from the narrator that is related to the events in the story
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