Read the paragraph.

Question

[1] Thomas Paine, a pivotal figure in the American Revolution, was born in Britain in 1737. [2] When he was in his mid-thirties, he met Benjamin Franklin in London. [3] Franklin helped Paine move to Philadelphia, where he pursued a career in journalism, he became the editor of Pennsylvania Magazine. [4] In 1776, Paine authored a pro-independence pamphlet called Common Sense, which was widely read throughout the colonies.

Which sentence should be revised to improve this paragraph’s sentence fluency?
sentence 1
sentence 2
sentence 3
sentence 4

Answer 1

Sentence 3 should be revised to improve the paragraph’s sentence fluency. The current structure is a run-on sentence, as it combines two independent clauses with a comma. It could be split into two sentences or revised for better flow. For example: "Franklin helped Paine move to Philadelphia, where he pursued a career in journalism. He became the editor of Pennsylvania Magazine."