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Read the following short paragraph. This paragraph is full of short, choppy sentences. Use your knowledge of sentence variety and prepositional phrases to improve the paragraph. Include all of the details in your revised version.
The clouds seemed to loom over the baseball field. The baseball field was near my house. A drop of rain fell on the infield dirt. The umpire looked into the sky. The sky opened up. A downpour of rain scattered everyone. People ran into the concession stand. Other people ran to their cars in the parking lot. The parking lot was behind the outfield.
My work:
The clouds seemed to loom over the baseball field near my house. As the umpire looked at the sky a drop of rain fell on the infield dirt. The clouds opened up and a downpour of rain scattered everyone. Some people ran into the concession stand while other people ran to their cars in the parking lot behind the outfield.
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