Please read for errors and correct them.

Question

Thank you for your request for a credit card with our store.
Before we can issue you a credit card, we must ask you to furnish the information on the enclosed credit application. When we receive it we will process your application as quickly as possible. Mail your application to the Attention of Mrs. Ann Collins, your credit representative. If you ever have a question concerning your account contact Mrs. Collins. She will be happy to help you personally.
For the next seven days, we will have a sell on personalize stationery. So that you may be able to take advantage of the sale, we have enclosed a brochure illustrating the designs available and containing an order form. If you wish to order some of this beautiful personalize stationery, we will process your order along with your credit application. You will be billed through your new account. This stationery sell ends Friday, July 7.
Thank you for you interest in our company. We look forward to serving you for many years to come.

Answer 1

Thank you for your request for a credit card with our store. Before we can issue a credit card, we ask that you to first finish completing the information on enclosed credit card application. When we receive it we will process your application as quickly as possible. Mail your application with Attention to Mrs. Ann Collins, your credit card representative. She will be personally happy to help you. For the next seven days we will be having a sale on personalized stationery. So you may be able to take advantage of the sale, we have enclosed a brochure illustrating the designs we have available and an order form. If you wish to order some of this beautiful personalized stationery, we will process your order along with your credit card application. You will be billed through your new account. This stationery sale ends Friday, July 7th. Thank you for interest in our company. We look forward to serving you for many years to come.

Answer 2

excuse me but I just wanted you to checka nd make sure that my commas was in the right place and if there is any other place I need to put some. I know that it is a little wordless but I am transcribing a message and that is what they said.

Answer 3

NO need for an attitude "Angel". Next time be more specific and specify that you just want make sure your commas are in the right place. You clearly wrote "please read for errors and correct them." #justsaying Here's the correct version with the commas as you transcribed. There are still alot of grammatical however--i digress...

Thank you for your request for a credit card with our store. Before we can issue you a credit card, we must ask you to furnish the information on the enclosed credit application. When we receive it we will process your application as quickly as possible. Mail your application to the Attention of Mrs. Ann Collins, your credit representative. If you ever have a question concerning your account, contact Mrs. Collins. She will be happy to help you personally.
For the next seven days we will have a sell on personalize stationery. So that you may be able to take advantage of the sale, we have enclosed a brochure illustrating the designs available and containing an order form. If you wish to order some of this beautiful, personalize stationery, we will process your order along with your credit application. You will be billed through your new account. This stationery sell ends Friday, July 7.
Thank you for you interest in our company. We look forward to serving you for many years to come.

Your welcome.