First of all, please retype that using correct English capitalization and punctuation. Then I'll read it for you.
Using all-caps is unacceptable -- online and in business.
please help me if my letter is correct in the grammar.
kindly help me to make a good letter.
march,21,2011
subject:sales commission
to: THE MANAGER
DEAR SIR,
SIR,I AM WRITING YOU DUE TO NEXT WILL BE MY ANNUAL VACATION AND I WOULD LIKE TO ASK A FAVORABLE REQUEST REGARDING MY SALES COMMISSION FROM THE MONTH OF OCT.2010.I AM SHORTAGE OF FINANCIALLY AND MY FAMILY HAS NO INCOME IN THE PHILIPPINES.I AM GOING ON VACATION ALTHOUGH I DON'T HAVE ENOUGH MONEY TO BRING BECAUSE MY FAMILY IS LONGING AND MISSING MEAND SOME IMPORTANT MATTERS NEEDED MY PERSONAL APPEARANCE.SIR,KINDLY PLEASE I REALLY NEED YOUR HELP IN ORDER TO RELEASE THE COMMISSION FROM THE MONTH OF OCT.2010.I HAVE NOT RECEIVED A COMMISSION FROM THE MONTH OF OCT.2011.I HOPE THAT YOU WILL HELP REGARDING THIS MATTER.IT WOULD BE A GREAT GRATITUDE AND I APPRECIATE YOU.
THANK YOU VERY MUCH FOR YOUR KIND HELP AND CONSIDERATION.
THANK YOU AND EST REGARDS.
JESSIE
SALESMAN
2 answers
Agreed. I did not read past the first few words because of that.