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Prompt: "I don't know the key to success,but the key to failure is to try to please everyone."

Assignment: Is trying to please people a way to achieve success or a route to failure?

Essay:

" I don't know the key to successs, but the key to failure is to try to please." Success is defined as perseverance, and failure is defined as no perseverance. Trying to please people does not involve oneself striving to succeed, but it involves a person to succeed through another person. Success means to succeed by oneself. Thus, trying to please people is not a way to achieve success but rather a route to failure

Pleasing people can be portrayed as flattered. For example, my uncle constantly gives presents to his boss in order to be promoted. Presents can not buy a position. True success is when a person strives through arduous obstacles. My uncle is not trying to achieve what he wants. Rather, he is obtaining it through pleasing others. His skills are not going to aleimorate if he keeps on being promoted through flattery.

Another example is that students in Asia tend to please their teachers, so they can get A's.They would give presents and food most of the time. They would even talk to their teachers as if the teachers were their friends. This is not success. It is cheating. The students are procuring success through their bogus actions. Pleasing everyone is hard to do every time, but people do it for their own advantage. They mask their failure with flattery.

Pleasing people can lead to flattery, which in turn leads to failure. Success consists of the achiever and his or her goals, not another person, who acts as a medium for the achiever.

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I'm sorry you're still using Anonymous as your name here. I hope you can find your Anonymous posts.
On the SAT scale, I would give it 3 at best. Your arguements are weak. You tend to generalize in your example. (Students in Asia...) The first sentence in the last paragraph.."can lead" is not a strong argument. The last sentence makes no sense. Overall, the argument you present is just weak.
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