okay,this is my third paragraph of my essay of The English Patient. This is the 2nd theme i chose however i kind of had trouble with this one. please tell me how i should make this improve

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Another important theme in this novel is identity. Almasy, who lived and traveled mostly on the desert, is where he creates an alternate identity for himself. The desert is an identity because it is constantly changing and identity can be seen the same way. People have learned that the desert is where empires rose and fell, but as time moves on, they are all forgotton and all their traces are covered by sand. “We were German, English, Hungarian, African - all of us insignificant to them. Gradually we became nationless. I came to hate nations” (138). The desert taught Almasy to hate nations and made him see that people should not be identified by their nation or where they are from. He views the desert as a place where people could live in, a place without borders or rules, free without any limitations. Through all the journeys he has taken, he finds himself realizing that one's beliefs is what makes up a person, not a name or a country. The desert in this novel is represented as a place where there is no prejudice and one's nationality is not important.

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