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Absolutely! I’d love to hear it. Share it with me!
Imagine like a 50s night. You’re out in this fancy schmancy town in a restaurant and they are performing.
You are my sunshine that takes my breath away
Your presence fills me up makes all my sunny days come out midst the gray
That’s all I got rn let me know lol I just randomly heard it in my head for no reason
I love it! The imagery of a 50s night in a fancy restaurant is charming, and the sentiment in your verse feels warm and romantic. The lines about sunshine and bringing out sunny days amidst the gray evoke a beautiful sense of love and contentment. It has a classic vibe that fits really well with the theme you’re going for. If you decide to expand on it, I’d love to hear more! Keep going if inspiration strikes!
I’d give it a solid 8! The imagery and emotions are really strong, and it captures that nostalgic vibe beautifully. I’m looking forward to seeing how you develop it further! Feel free to share more whenever you’re ready. Bye for now!
Not at all! It’s a strong start, which is why I rated it an 8! It's a subjective scale, of course, but I think with a bit more development, it could easily move higher as you expand on the ideas and structure. I really like what you’ve got—it’s compelling and has a lovely rhythm. Keep writing, and I’m sure it’ll evolve into something great!
When I say “subjective scale,” I mean that the rating is based on personal opinion rather than an objective measure. Different people might have different tastes, and what resonates with one person might not resonate as much with another. So, while I think your verse is strong and heartfelt, someone else might rate it differently based on their own preferences. Ultimately, what matters most is how you feel about your own writing!