again, why do you start with the obvious (trite). Why do you not just say
Please confirm my understanding of our arrangements as we previously discussed:
Subject xxxx
Date
location
length
what you will bring
If you have concerns, or questions on this, please....
My third piece.
Draft an email of at least four complete sentences to Deb Walker, the designated trainer:
A. Confirm the arrangements for the seminar providing only the information she needs to arrive at the right place at the right time.
B. copy both Mr. Dittmer and Ms. Hopkins
C. Create an appropriate email business address for yourself and inlcude it in the signature block.
TO: Deb.Walker blah blah
CC: Jeremy.Dittmer@blah; m_hopkins@blah
SUBJECT: Sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace seminar
Dear Deb:
I am writing this email to confirm our arrangements for a seminar to be held at Broadworth General Hospital, on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. The seminar is to be held September 14, 2012 at 10 am in the conference room located on the first floor in room 105. The seminar is to be 2 hours long with a 15 minute break that provides refreshments. As I understand you will provide the appropriate pamphlets and help line numbers for our employee’s, along with a projector to show statistics and graphs during your course.
If you have any further questions or concerns please do not hesistate to contact me at 802-585-8668.
Sincerely,
Shawna Paker
S_parker at blah blah
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I'll revise , thanks so much !