My second paragraph: "Free time is another one of my favorite things about summer. Not being preoccupied by some kind of assignment or curricular activity brings me happiness beyond belief. It enables me to spend time with my family, to take part in the things they wish to do. It enables me to live life without the worry of schoolwork or the hours of exercise I haven’t yet performed. The ability to do everything and nothing at any given time brings life into perspective. It ultimately makes me realize what’s truly important."
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Find the duplicate ideas, and cut, cut, cut!
I don't understand. Which duplicated ideas do you speak of?
What do you suggest that I should revise?
"Free time is another one of my favorite things about summer."
"Not being preoccupied by some kind of assignment or curricular activity brings me happiness beyond belief."
"The ability to do everything and nothing at any given time brings life into perspective."
These three sentences bring out pretty much the same idea to me. Try writing something more specific.
P.S. I'm a different Anonymous.
"Not being preoccupied by some kind of assignment or curricular activity brings me happiness beyond belief."
"The ability to do everything and nothing at any given time brings life into perspective."
These three sentences bring out pretty much the same idea to me. Try writing something more specific.
P.S. I'm a different Anonymous.
What do you mean by "more specific"?
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