Ming-na approached the door with her heart jackhammering in her chest; she paused because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.
Ming-na walked up to the door scared out of her wits; she didn’t open it because she smelled smoke.
How can the sentence be revised to eliminate cliché and include sensory language without changing the meaning of the sentence?
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Scared, Ming-na approached the door; she didn’t open it because smoke tickled her nostrils.
Scared, Ming-na approached the door; she didn’t open it because smoke tickled her nostrils.
Ming moved slowly to the door scared out of her wits; she paused because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.
Ming moved slowly to the door scared out of her wits; she paused because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.
Ming-na approached the door with her heart jackhammering in her chest; she paused because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.
Ming-na approached the door with her heart jackhammering in her chest; she paused because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.
Ming-na walked up to the door scared out of her wits; she didn’t open it because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.
Ming-na walked up to the door scared out of her wits; she didn’t open it because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.
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