Option A is the best choice for revising the sentence to eliminate clichés and include sensory language. It effectively conveys Ming-na's fear and incorporates vivid sensory details, such as "heart jackhammering" and "acrid scent of smoke."
So, the revision would be:
A. Ming-na approached the door with her heart jackhammering in her chest; she paused because the acrid scent of smoke assaulted her nostrils.